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Peer
Critique Materials for Essay #2 Drafts
Essay #2 requires you to analyze the
historical significance of a primary source from the 1930s or 1940s. Your
goal as a writer is to present an arguable, well-focused thesis developed
logically and supported by effectively analyzed evidence. Each paragraph
of the essay should have a clear purpose in advancing the thesis.
Your primary goal as a peer respondent
is to help writers in your group to reach the goals described above.
Today in Class
We will begin by developing a list
of criteria for evaluating Essay #2 drafts.
Refer to the list as you read through each draft.
You will need to do the following for
each of the drafts you critique:
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Each student should complete and receive
two critiques. Write "Critique" on the top of all drafts for which
you are responsible. Put your name on all drafts you critique, and on any
notes you make for the writers. Without names, I cannot give peer respondents
credit for their work.
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Each writer should explain to the group
any particular concerns or questions she or he has about the draft. Peer
respondents for this writer should note these concerns on their copy of
the draft.
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Give one copy of your draft to Kimberlee
Homework for Wednesday
By the beginning of class on Wednesday,
you should have done the following for each draft: margin
comments, a descriptive outline, a grid
and suggestions for revision. Although you can
print in the margins of the draft, you must type your descriptive outlines
and overall suggestions for revision. You should plan to spend 90 minutes
on each critique.
Margin Comments
Use the following guidelines to comment
in the margins of both drafts:
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Read though the essay twice, once to get
an overview of the argument, organization, development, and style and again
to make comments.
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Evaluate the writer’s thesis in the margins
of the essay. Does it present an argument about the primary source? Are
there points raised in the essay that are not clarified in the thesis paragraph?
Does the thesis forecast points not addressed in the essay?
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In the margins of the paper, identify
at least one of the writer's strengths. Explain why you think the author
has done something effectively (for example, used evidence well, made a
logical connection between two ideas, etc.).
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In the margins of the paper, identify
places where the writer could develop the argument. Pose questions that
you think will help the writer develop the argument or explain why the
argument isn't convincing to you.
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In the margins of the paper, identify
places where evidence is used well and where it is used ineffectively.
Explain why the writer’s use of evidence is more or less effective in these
places.
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Choose a paragraph to critique in terms
of style and grammar. Does the writer need to reorder sentences? Rewrite
them? Combine them? Vary their structure? Does the writer need to use stronger
transitions between points? Do you see a particular pattern of grammatical
errors in this paragraph?
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In all of your comments, make sure you
have addressed the writer’s questions and concerns.
Grid
Complete a grid
for each writer.
Descriptive
Outline
On a separate sheet, type a descriptive
outline of the paper. Writing a descriptive outline helps peer editors
formulate a clear sense of the structure and development of a draft. Reading
a descriptive outline helps writers to see their work through a reader’s
eyes, to determine if what they have written is what they meant to write,
and to evaluate the effectiveness of their organizational structure. To
prepare a descriptive outline:
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Number the paragraphs in the draft.
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Restate the thesis or central claim of
the essay in your own words. The thesis may not be completely clear in
the opening paragraph. You may need to add to your restatement as you work
through the essay. If you have had to infer the thesis, note this in your
restatement.
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For each paragraph:
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List the main assertion or topic of the
paragraph.
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In a sentence or two, summarize what the
paragraph says.
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Indicate the paragraph’s function in the
essay. In other words, what is the writer trying to do in this paragraph
(for example, develop a sub-argument related to the thesis, present and
analyze evidence, etc.)?
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Note how the paragraph relates back to
the thesis and explain how you know.
Suggestions
for Revision
Review your margin comments, grid,
and descriptive outline, then type three suggestions the writer can use
to revise the essay. Place these suggestions in order of priority, considering
what the writer needs to do first in order to produce a more effective
draft. Be specific with your suggestions, offering the writer strategies
for revision if possible.
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Class:
MWF 10:30-11:20
Location:
Mueller 154
Contact:
K.
Gillis-Bridges
Office:
Padelford A-16
Phone:
543-4892
Hours: TTh
10:30-11:30
and
by appointment
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